“Whoever said ‘what you don’t know can’t hurt you’ had never been in courier Kate Donohue’s shoes. She can’t remember anything from a special rush job this afternoon, but whatever happened must have been pretty wild, because now there’s a werewolf in her kitchen trying to kill her. And he’s just the first in line. Suddenly Kate’s running for her life, but if she doesn’t remember what happened soon, more than her life will be at stake.”
“Whoever said ‘what you don’t know can’t hurt you’ had never been in courier Kate Donohue’s shoes. She can’t remember anything from a special rush job this afternoon, but whatever happened must have been pretty wild, because now there’s a werewolf in her kitchen trying to kill her. And he’s just the first in line.
It’s a nasty introduction to the hidden world of the shifters, but the news gets worse. It’s a world at war, and Kate will be a casualty if she can’t remember what happened – but first she has to live through the night.”
Actually, I would get rid of the first sentence. The quote just gets in the way of the actual meat of your story. Maybe start something like this?
“Courier Kate Donohue can’t remember her special rush job this afternoon, but she does know that whatever it was, it set a werewolf on her trail. And now the wolf is in the kitchen, trying to kill her …”
Also maybe talk about what Kate’s goal is–other than remembering–what’s her main mission?
Sounds exciting!
Thanks for your input, Jenn. You’re right, I need more about Kate and her goal. Hard to do without giving away the book’s big secret! **Goes off to work on blurb some more.**